Mental Prisons 12-15

This critique is for Chapter 12-1 through 12-15, featuring my OC detective character, Jenn Delora. I appreciate that you have Jenn coming to the scene of the Ace's abduction as the two characters have a history of joint adventures and respect and friendliness for each other. The flashback where Jenn remembers her own defeat was good as a reminder of what has gone before for anyone just coming into the story, but the repetitive use of the same panel with only a word changing was overdone. I understand the attempt to show the slow passage of time as she gradually overcame her "frozen" state, but one panel with eight separate thought balloons from top left to bottom right, ellipses to show pauses between thoughts, and a text box saying "Over the next day" (or, whatever time period you feel passed), would have moved things along more quickly.

Jenn looks good. The fact that she's deaf wasn't always clear in her interactions with the police officer, but she can read lips so it's a possible explanation. Overall, these pages are a good set-up and lead-in for the next group of images. Thank you for using Jenn in your story! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="392" title=" (Smile)"/>